Saturday, September 15, 2012

The Loan



Today I am joining  
The one word prompt is: Awkward.

The Loan
Jeff had a good thing, but didn’t appreciate it. 
Bob saw a good thing, and did.
Bob said, “Let me borrow twenty bucks to take her out on a date.” 
Jeff replied, “She won’t go, but if she does keep the twenty bucks.”
He never had to repay the loan.



22 comments:

  1. Dear McGuffy Ann, I so enjoy your sense of humor and your ability to tell a story in five sentences--and sometimes less. You hint and we all get it! Peace.

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  2. This was great and probably takes the prize for the least words used in this challenge this week too! Really efficient writing.

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  3. I love it.

    Even though I got married to the love of my life twenty years, do you think Jeff might loan me twenty, too?

    Great, great little tale... Randy

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  4. I loved it!! That was fabulous! That was just a great story in such a small space. Well done!

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  5. And Jeff probably has no clue what he lost. Nicely done! Welcome to FSF. :)

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  6. I just knew this was the perfect spot for your writing talents, Annie. You are so very good at careful crafting with words. This was a truly delightful story, impossible not to smile at the end! Great job, Annie at her best! :-)

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  7. I love your story, you've packed so much into your 5 sentences.
    I look forward to reading more of your writing.
    And thanks for the comment on mine! :-)

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  8. I love your story, you have packed so much into 5 short sentences and nothing more needs to be added.
    I look forward to reading more of your writing.
    And thanks for the kind comment on my story. :-)

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  9. Your collection of 5 really packed a punch!
    Thanks for stopping by my blog and leaving a comment.

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  10. That was great Ann, I love your style!

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  11. This is the perfect prompt for your busy week ... short and sweet and to the point. Do you think the Jeff's in the world would get it ... I doubt it, but we do. Awesome, Awesome, Annie. This is more like you ... I like that your are getting more into your writing :)

    Andrea

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  12. This, Ann, is an awesome first entry. I enjoyed the play. :)

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  13. Way to go, Bob! So much conveyed in so few words; very nice.

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  14. What a delicious economy of words and meaning. Beautifully done!

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  15. A great story, with so much packed into your five, short sentences. Glad you've joined in with FSF look forward to more.

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  16. Welcome to 5SF. And what a great introductory offering. Concise, funny, and snappy. Nice one. Looking forward to your next one.

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  17. I once had $20 to spend on wine, women and song.

    After a quick trip to Trader Joe's, I did a lot of singing.

    Solo.

    Cheers!
    JzB

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  18. Awesome way to get the most across in the least space. That's not easy to do, but you did it perfectly!! Nice job :) I'm so glad you've joined in on Five Sentence Fiction this week. Look forward to reading more of your writing.

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