Friday, March 15, 2013

"Paradise"


For too many years she had been confined, a prisoner within herself. She had long since forgotten the independence of movement. Every silent waking moment was spent praying for ultimate freedom.

Now she felt calmness spread through her, releasing the heavy grief of her pain. Closing her eyes she gave in, feeling herself grow lighter as she drifted toward the paradise of final peace.


Word Prompt: Paradise

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  1. This is lovely in a very sad way! Take care
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    1. I think it happens more often than we think. Thank you.

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  2. This was done very, very well. You really can string some lovely words together.

    Have a fabulous day. ☺

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    1. Thank you, Sandee. I appreciate you saying that.

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  3. too many folks have to 'lie in wait' for that release.

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    1. I agree. I try to write for those who may not be heard.

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  4. Totally beautiful and irrevocably sad...

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  5. Nice words for such a sad moment, I almost couldn't open this, for fear of what I was about to read! It was your title that gave me the strength to open it! Peace at long last, is good.

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    1. Peace is the thing we all seek. It can come in so many ways, depending upon our personal journey.

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  6. I have a fear of this- you expressed it beautifully.

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    1. Thank you; I appreciate your thoughts.

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  7. That final peace comes at a price and you so eloquently expressed it in your choice of words.
    JB

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  8. This is sadly beautiful. Terrific writing.

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  9. Um...wow. This is sad, scary and uplifting all at the same time.

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  10. The idea of, say, having a stroke and my active mind trapped in a useless body is one of my greatest fears. You described that "prison" (perfect word) so well... and then the gradual surrender to lift, to be free. For this person I would say, "Thank God you were able to let go." Sometimes doctors are more determined to "win," to have a half-living body rather than let the person go, too. Everyone should have a health proxy.

    Wow, you got me all riled up! That's a good quality in a poet. Peace, Amy

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    1. Thank you. You got this. And thanks for the "riled up" comment...then I did my job!

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  11. This was so beautifully done! I didn't feel sadness, I felt pain at the entrapment and total joy at the release. Peace and freedom at last. Isn't that what we all long for?

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    1. Thank you, Josie. That is what is was all about. I appreciate that.

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  12. This was written so well, you express the understanding behind the pain, the need for peace that by the time we get to the end we too long for peace. Beautiful

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    1. Thank you. I appreciate that very much.

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  13. You are such a master at this genre of "little" fiction, and Mom always enjoys your stories. She went to the funeral of a dear friend on Friday and so found this very meaningful. She says, "Thanks." Purrs and hugs from the kitties at www.thecatonmyhead.com, Lily Olivia, Misty May, Mauricio, Giulietta, Fiona, Astrid, Lisbeth and Calista Josette

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    1. I am sorry for your loss. I am glad to have been able to helped you even a bit with this. Thank you. Peace,

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  14. Sad but also pleased for her, you conveyed the two nicely.

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    1. Thank you. I really wanted to do that.

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  15. A very touching piece of writing.

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  16. A great five sentences giving voice to a peaceful end of life.

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  17. Peaceful and beautiful after the torture of a purgatory of sorts...

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