Saturday, June 22, 2013

Mr. Peabody


Everyone knew that Mr. Peabody was living in the old car. It was obvious; all of the signs were there: the mess and the odor.

They tried to evict him for months, but he was an elusive old guy. He stayed in there, and ended up dying in that very car.

They finally found his little dead mouse body, up against the blower motor fan blades.

Story & Photo by: McGuffy Ann Morris

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Word Prompt: "Blades"

44 comments:

  1. Old mother Hubbard lived in a cupboard,
    And an old lady lived in a shoe,
    so what was the big deal with Peabody living in a car?

    Eviction? Like what's up with that?

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    1. There were better, safer, more pleasant options.

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    2. P.S. I don't think Old Mother Hubbard actually lived in the cupboard!

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    3. Hey, a mouse has to live somewhere.
      And where do you think the old mother lived?

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    4. Mr. Peabody lived & died where he wanted to, apparently. Peace to him.
      Old Mother Hubbard, I have no idea...I expect a story about it!

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  2. I've had to evict one out of my previous car too, the hard way. I hate to trap the little thing but it was not allowed to stay there one minute longer.

    Your story had me picturing an old man living in the old abandoned car, ha,ha,ha.

    Happy Summer.
    Hugs,
    JB

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    1. I thought I might surprise some with this one!

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  4. Oh dear, not a good thing at all. But I'm rather liking his name and it gives poor sad little Mr. Peabody an edge for our liking him.

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  5. Mice. Any form. Not a fan. :)

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    1. Come on, Roe! They are critters, too!

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  6. Aw, poor thing. Love the surprise ending!

    Have a great day. ☺

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  7. Yep, sometimes you aren't going to get them out. Period.

    It was a surprise ending for me too.

    Have a terrific day. ☺

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  8. Very clever and surprising ending. I love the name you chose too. xx

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    1. Thank you, Lizzie. I always am happy for you to visit!

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  9. I was surprised at the ending. Great writing!

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  10. Oh dear, this was a surprising an delightful read. I start out feeling sad that this will be about a poor homeless guy, and it turns out to be about a mouse who probably thought he lived in a mansion and was nice and safe and dry in the old car... and died in his own home, as we all wish to do! Excellent writing, you reeled us all in! As for mousies... I love them... OUTSIDE! Mice in the house freak me out, but the furkids are quick to let us know when we have "company". I prefer the humane box traps which let you catch and release, Papa Bear find that really amusing... release to return again another day he says.

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    1. Yes, Mr. Peabody had a wonderful life of luxury. I do agree, Have-a-Heart traps are a good alternative, if possible and necessary.

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  11. Well that had a twist in the tail (*tale - no pun intended) Excellent use of the prompt..xx

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  12. Hysterical! I can so relate. Mice crawl up into my motor all the time. Destructive little beasts! Really a fun take on the prompt, McGuffy. :)

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    1. Thanks, Jayne! It does happen, I know!

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  13. he he - you are sneaky! Surprise ending. Poor little mousie!

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  14. You continue to inspire me. I still haven't gotten up the courage to try one of these writing prompts yet. You are such a clever girl!

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  15. Oh, I believed you - until I saw the badge.

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  16. That was terrific. I like how you didn't reveal what kind of being Mr. Peabody was until the last line.

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  17. I thought it was an actual person. Good one..

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  18. Awww! Poor little mouse! We once had a rat inside our garage that would raid the garbage cans and run up underneath my son's car and put things around the engine. One time it was mashed potatoes! :)

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  19. You could certainly feel the story!
    Scott
    Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/06/21/4935/

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  20. Dear McGuffyAnn, what a plotter you are! You built the suspense and then came the revelation! Wow. Peace.

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  21. Well, I wasn't expecting that ending - very nicely done. We had mice move into a car engine once - they ate all the electrics before moving on.

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