Saturday, June 29, 2013

The View


The time had come for Rose to move into assisted living, where she was quite insistent upon a room with a view. She chose a room that overlooked the beautiful courtyard, with its flowers and wild birds. 

The area was carefully maintained and continually busy from dawn to dusk. Rose would sit and breathe in the floral scents, as she listened to the songs of the birds.

Now totally sightless, she valued the imagined view outside her room.

Story by: McGuffy Ann Morris
Picture: Photobucket


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Word Prompt: "View"

51 comments:

  1. What a lovely story with an unexpected ending.

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  2. Sometimes the sights in our mind are better than those from our eyes

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  3. You have a great imagination. Lovely 5 sentence fiction story.
    Hugs,
    JB

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  4. Nice work! The ending is just perfect. :)

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    1. Thank you, Dana. I am glad you liked it!

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  5. This was such a sweet and gentle story, Annie! As we get older our memories sustain us, and in this case the garden she "envisioned" was just as lovely or moreso than any real garden she might ever have seen. I wish that all those who face similar situations, could have her perspective on life and her desire to make the very best of what remained. Great write, loved it!

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    1. Thanks, Josie. Memories can be strong, making us strong, too.

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  6. I didn't expect that ending, but isn't our imaginations wonderful. Well it is if we use our imaginations.

    Have a terrific day. :)

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    1. Thanks, Sandee. Memories can help us with our imagination, if we let it.

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  7. Beautiful. Since my grandmother was blind and living in a nursing home, I can picture her in my mind thinking about the beautiful view.

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    1. Thank you; I am glad this spoke to you. That's why I like to write!

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  8. I totally didn't see that ending coming. It's perfect, though.

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    1. Thank you. I always appreciate your thoughts.

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  9. Dear McGuffy Ann, you are good at weaving a five-sentence story that evokes emotion from the reader. It is, as "Maggie Grace" said, a "bittersweet" story. Peace.

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  10. Lovely and there is always something in your work that is totally unexpected.

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  11. Another lovely short Short.You do these so well. Janet

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    1. That is so nice of you to say. Thanks.

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  12. Woah!!! What an ending! You are so talented!

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    1. I really respect your thoughts. Thank you!

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  13. Cool story! That's where I would have liked to sit too. Nice twist at the end. : )

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  14. Well done. I want to play. Going to check out the site. Thanks.

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  15. having reached the stage of my life where my mother and my friend's parents are in the same situation as Rose, it brought out a bit of emotion. Nice story!

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    1. Thank you. I am glad this spoke to you.

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  16. This resonates with me. My mother was blind in her last years; and what she saw was only what she remember having seen. So sad really, but good that those who are blind can still imagine.

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  17. One of my biggest fears is losing my sight. Your story adds a whole new level of the awareness of folks who are blind. Very nicely done.

    Barbara @ www.allmylivesnow.com

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    1. Thank you! I am glad you enjoyed it.

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  19. You are a master at surprise endings ... this is awesome and touching. How do you do that???

    Andrea

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    1. Thanks, Andrea. I don't know...I just write what I see and feel. I am happy when it moves someone, though.

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  20. So good! It made me wonder about Rose's life before and after the move and blindness. Great hook for a book.

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  21. Loved your story. I fear Rose's wish wouldn't be granted in most care homes given her lack of sight. The importance of the other senses is so often overlooked.

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  22. What a gorgeous story. I was not expecting that. The smell of flowers is so powerful and calming. A lovely read. xx

    http://40somethingundomesticateddevil.blogspot.co.uk/2013/07/five-sentence-fiction-view-part-4-zoe.html

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