Sunday, March 16, 2014

"Lucky"


The storm had come out of nowhere, fast and furious, covering everything with a sheet of ice. Traveling the slick untreated roads in the dim early morning, Gus should have known to take it slowly.

Pulling him from the rolled, mangled wreckage of what once was his Jeep, the emergency medical technicians told Gus how lucky he was. He watched as the police gathered the several dozen medicine bottles and hundreds of pills strewn across the road around the wreckage.

Gus now wondered if his luck had just run out.

Story & Photo: McGuffy Ann Morris

Word Prompt: Lucky

40 comments:

  1. If the cops showed up, his luck has run out.

    Great job.

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    1. Thank you, Gail. I appreciate your thoughts here.

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  2. I really like that Gus was not just out for an innocent drive and you've managed to work in a second level to the prompt. I wonder what will happen to poor Gus now, but seeing as we don't know what the pills were perhaps poor isn't the right wording.
    The only snag I have with this piece is the proximity of pill bottles and pills next to each other. Personally I would prefer capsule, or tablets instead of pills, but that's just me and repetition.

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    1. I agree, and did make a change that I think works well. Thanks.

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  3. I can totally relate to your story of sheet of ice,how dangerous it can be if the driver is not cautious. Will you please continue this story it is so amazing. I want to know what happened to Gus.
    Thank you.

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    1. Thanks! I will think on that suggestion.

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  4. I know how it feels to be rescued and alive,
    It feels blessed and lucky for sure
    Nice read

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  5. Thats a nice story :-) wud love to read d sequel of dis to knw wat happened to Gus :-)

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  6. This story made me wonder if Gus was selling these drugs and wreaking other people 's lives along with his. Intriguing story.
    Hugs,
    JB

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  7. As you said, perspective is everything.

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  8. Sounds interesting story! To be continued?

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  9. These stories always freak me out, but it was good otherwise!! :)

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    1. My word! This is mild, compared to many!

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  10. Maybe it was the police who got the lucky break, not Gus.

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  11. OH what a winner. What a core that needed the barest buffing to make it shine!

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  12. Oh oh! Sounds like Gus got busted up....and then got Busted!
    Awesome short - bravo!

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    1. Thanks, Les. I appreciate your thoughts!

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  13. Scary and thought-provoking as well.

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  14. Uh-ho, looks like his luck has run out indeed. Very well written!

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    1. Thank you, Shail. I appreciate your comments!

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  15. This makes me want to stay off the roads with people like Gus out there. Good one, McGuffy!

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    1. Thank you, Jayne! Be careful; you never know!

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  16. Yes, I would definitely say that Gus' luck has run out. Great take on the story, and how funny that we both should choose to write about a car accident. :)

    Blessings,
    Cheryl

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  17. Gus definitely had been lucky on this day, I'd never drive anywhere in weather like this as it's almost like playing Russian Roulette with a loaded gun. Here you're using about a vehicle weighing about a ton instead of bullet, Vividly done.

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