Saturday, May 20, 2017

The Snow


Winter was early this year. Rains had changed to freezing. Now, strong winds brought snow into the valley.

Pa said he had to go bring in the cattle. They didn’t understand this storm; they needed him. They would get lost and perish on the back forty.

He made me promise that I would wait for him to come back. He said to stay inside the house and keep the fire going. I swore that I would mind Pa, no matter what.

Through the frosted window, I watched snow cover the trees with its icy beauty. I was worried sick about the cows, though. And, now Pa, too.

Pa has been gone for days, or is it weeks? I can’t remember. I tried to keep the fire going. But, I am so cold, and so very tired. I kept my promise, if it matters anymore. 

Story: McGuffy Ann Morris
Word Count= 146 words
Image Prompt: loniangraphics


Writing challenge:
story of 100-150 words,
inspired by photo prompt

31 comments:

  1. What breaks my heart is to think how many times something similar probably happened in days past. Excellent story!

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    1. I remember stories form the farms. The weather plays a major factor in farmer's lives. Thanks, Mimi!

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  2. That is a good story. Hope the cows and Pa made it home.

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  3. I have a feeling the story has a sad ending but honouring a promise to keep the fire going until his return give rise to other questions. How sound of mind was this person left behind? Did he/she tried to find help to look for his/ her dad? Will he/she starved to death waiting by the fire.
    Has there been other such stories before this with similar endings? I want pa back home and the cattle fed and comfortable.

    Hugs, Julia

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    1. I wondered what you would think of this story. I like to leave questions for the reader to answer.
      Of course you want Pa home and the cattle safe and fed. I know you would do just that, too.
      Thank you for being here. HUGS!

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  4. Oh, this is so sad. I really hope that there could be a happy ending with Pa coming back just when you least expect it.

    Cait @ Click's Clan

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    1. Cait, I leave it to you how this turns out. But, I am happy you were moved to comment. Thanks. Hugs.

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  5. Excellent take on the photo prompt! The ending is sad but hope is not lost.

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    1. Thank you! I appreciate you visiting and commenting, too. I agree with your assessment.

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  6. My hope would be that somehow, some way, Pa and the cows made it home safely.

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  7. Great tension here, and such a sad ending. Even if Pa and the cows are somehow safe somewhere -- a cave, maybe -- if the narrator has let the fire go out, it's hard to hold much hope. Given the language used, I get the impression the narrator is young, which makes it even sadder. Poignant tale!

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    1. Thank you. I think you found what I was going for here.

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  8. A very moving story, with some lovely descriptions. As you say in a comment above, the weather plays a huge part in farmers' lives. It was easy to visualise the sad events playing out in your story. Nicely written.

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  9. So powerful for such a small number of words. I'm intrigued by the Flash Fiction challenge and just may check it out.

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  10. Oh how sad a story which I suspect is so true in year's past.

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  11. Beautiful and yet so sad. You have to admire the child's dedication and hopefulness even as the end approaches.

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  12. Atmospheric from the very first line. Great story!

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  13. Beautifully written . The tale of uncertainty and hope , the tale of life .
    Moon
    https://aslifehappens60.wordpress.com

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  14. EagleAye summarized it well. A poignant take on this one.

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  15. Great description and take on this one.

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  16. Well written story. Waiting and hoping without closure is very difficult.

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  17. Beautifully crafted story with a lovely take.

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  18. Beautifully crafted and a lovely take.

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  19. Excellent take. I can see him sitting there, keeping the fire going.

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  20. Very well written and constructed and love the voice too. Looks like a sad end is in sight.

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